Wahida’s Backstory:
Old prompt:
Old prompt:
Wahida grew up attached-to-the-hip, so to speak, of her older sister. Since her parents were the King and Queen of the capitol city of the desert, she was essentially raised by her older sister, Hadima. At a young age, they invested time into worshipping the goddess of water, Akia, in hopes the goddess will hear them and show them the way to an oasis called, "Suihira." Passionate about finding the oasis, Wahida didn't do anything but pray to the goddess, causing her to be shut-in from society, save for her older sister. Later on, when Hadima began her studies, she learned that the oasis is a complete myth, and that Akia had abandoned . Not wanting to break Wahida's heart, Hadima continued to pray and worship the water goddess together for a number of years. Hadima couldn't keep Wahida from the truth forever, and eventually broke it to her that the oasis is a myth and that the goddess abandoned humanity centuries ago. At this point, Wahida was so obsessed with praying to the goddess that she accused her sister as being a nonbeliever, and completely shut herself from society. One day, the goddess approached Wahida and told her the way to the oasis. Unprepared for the desert wilderness, Wahida boldly runs away from home--quickly learning the has no idea how to survive in the wild.
Wahida’s Attributes:
Naive -
Stubborn -
Obsessive -
Close-Minded -
Determined +
Sensitive -
Foolish -
Polite +
Timid -
Generous +
Religious o
Fearful -
Introverted -
Goal-Oriented +
Soft-Spoken -
Quiet +
Inept -
Direct +
Honest +
Socially Awkward -
Modest +
Passionate +
Aloof -
Moody -
Resentful -
14 - / 9+
Stubborn -
Obsessive -
Close-Minded -
Determined +
Sensitive -
Foolish -
Polite +
Timid -
Generous +
Religious o
Fearful -
Introverted -
Goal-Oriented +
Soft-Spoken -
Quiet +
Inept -
Direct +
Honest +
Socially Awkward -
Modest +
Passionate +
Aloof -
Moody -
Resentful -
14 - / 9
Tollbooth Exercise:
Wahida drives toward the tollbooth, eyes fixed to the
traffic gate. She pulls up to the booth, and opens her glove box to grab
change. Wahida freezes in place, realizing she had left her money at home. She
slowly puts her hands back on the wheel and stares at the road beyond the
traffic gate. Wahida bites her lip. The car behind her starts to honk. She looks
in her rear-view mirror, looking at the driver behind her with his hand in the
air in a confused gesture. Wahida looks forward again and rubs her neck. She
hesitantly opens her car door and attempts to yell to the driver, “Excuse me! Do
you have any change?” “What?” She sighs, unbuckles herself, and gets out of the
car, approaching the other driver. She plays with her fingers as she walks up
to the driver. The driver glares at Wahida as he rolls the window down. Wahida
starts to repeat herself, “Excuse me sir—“ “What the hell are you doing? Don’t
you see we’ve got places to go?” Wahida bows her head down, hearing other
drivers start honking. “I’m so sorry, but I have neglected to bring any change.
Do you think you can perhaps loan me some?” The driver sighs and reaches in his
glove box. He hands her the change with an annoyed expression. Wahida’s face
lights up, “Oh, thank you so much, sir!” “Yeah, yeah. Now get going.” Wahida
nods and scrambles back to her car, drops the change into the booth, and crawls
back into her car. As the gate raises, Wahida hastily drives away, nearly
hitting the bar.
Backstory: This is more of a story than a backstory. I would like to see the relationships and motivations for who she is explored. Why does she believe these things? What happened ot her relationship with her older sister? Why is she not close with others? How do they interact with her? More about this world, the city, technology, etc. Make me believe in this world and this person is real – I am not there, yet.
ReplyDeleteAttribute list: Good list, but close-minded? She seems to be the only one open minded enough to believe in this goddess (but I still want to know why).
Tollbooth: I like the manner in which she interacts with the others – she is coming alive. Would like to see/know more about her initial reaction to the problem.
I've added a new backstory.
DeleteIt's really amazing to see how much backstory you put into your cactus concept! I can really get a feel for the unique world that this is set in and wish that the short wasnt a minute long so we could see more of it! The backstory makes me think your short will be a drama and when I first saw the concept art I assumed it would be a comedy. I think you could pull off either direction and am excited to see what you come up with.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy your character very much, from reading both backstory and tollbooth, i got a good sense of how your character would react to different scenarios. your attributes list seem on point, but going back to the backstory i wish l felt like i was in the shoes of your character more. i feel like i didn't get enough info about her background.
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